雅思高分作文的四大要素及范文

雅思高分作文的四大要素及范文

雅思考试的评分标准包括四个方面：

Task Response

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为“内容”，“逻辑结构”，“语法的准确使用和范围”以及“词汇量”四个标准。根据下面的全面修改案例，读者可以清楚的看到一篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。Cambridge 8 – Test 2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed becauseof technology.

In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships peoplemake?

Has this become a positive or negative development?

原文：

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because oftechnology.

Yes, the technology has changed the people’s interaction in very enhancedmanner. Earlier people use to wait and try to find easy way to contact theirfriends or relatives leaving far. In past there was no quick technology tocontact or to establish any communication between one person to another person.The drawback with past communication systems was that it were very slow and weretime taking process such as telegrams, letter etc. People used to afraid towrite their personal feedbacks or things to their love ones due to insecuremedium of communication. When it comes to professional level, the privacy andaccuracy should be maintain but, to that time there were no securecommunications.

Now the things have changed around, people from far distance contact theirloves one in an easy and quick ways which improves the interaction level betweentwo person. Quality the level of the interaction between people to people, hasimproved because the people are equipped with high-tec technology which enhancesthe communication. There are many many medium which are available now such asinternet, called cards etc.

The technology has provided the mobility faster which help people to talkor to interact at any time anywhere in the world.

People can contact their friend or relatives any time they want. It hasbecome so easier and feriendly to be in touch with your feriends, relatives evenwith the unknown people.

原文翻译：

今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了变化。

是的。技术改善了人们的交流方式。以前人们总是期待找到方便的方法联系居住在异地的亲朋好友。以前没有高效的技术帮助人们沟通交流。以往的通讯系统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写一些私密的事情因为担心通信不够安全。专业的通信技术应该是安全的、准确的，但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。

现在，这些事情已经改变了，住在远处的人们利用一种高效的方式联系他们的爱人。这些方式改善了人们之间的交流方式。因为人们使用了改善交流的高科技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。

这些技术提供了更快的移动性，帮助人们在任何时间、世界上的任何地方与他人沟通。

现在人们能够在任何时间联系亲朋好友。和朋友、家人以及陌生人的沟通变得更容易了。

(注：上述的习作存在语法错误和表达错误，因此对应的翻译也有一定出入。)